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¿de donde saca esa energia? No conosco mucho de los personajes,pero me gusta el fics!

Respuesta del autor: Ambos tienen mucha energía XDrnMe alegra que te guste aunque no los conozcas mucho (realmente recomiendo la serie, es muy divertida).

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Fecha: 23/10/16 - 09:08 pm Título: ¿Quieres ser papá?

Holaa!! Justo estoy haciéndome un maratón de Navy (voy por la novena temporada) y aquí estás tú, con tu fic, me emocioné mucho cuando lo descubrí porque en general hay muy muy pocos fics de la serie en español y aún menos slash. Sobre el fic, decirte que me gustó mucho tanto la idea como tu forma de contarlo, creo que sí que es verdad que te falta mejorar un poco en algunos momentos, por ejemplo, la manera de transmitir al lector lo que está ocurriendo, quizás describir más algunas situaciones o algunos escenarios (sobretodo en los dialogos) para que el lector pueda meterse dentro del la propia escena.

 Pero para mejorar hay que escribir y escribir y escribir, así que sigue actualizando y tendrás una lectora que leerá con ansia cada capítulo. Imagina si ya lo estás haciendo bien, en el capítulo 10, será excelente!!!

 Espero que continues la historia, tengo muchas ganas de ver a papi Tony y papá Gibbs! Nos vemos en el próximo capitulo! Un saludo!!!!

Respuesta del autor: Me alegra que te esté gustando, es cierto que hay muy pocos, por suerte yo suelo leerlos en inglés que hay bastantes.rnMuchísimas gracias por la crítica, hasta ahora no me habían dado ningún consejo para mejorar y la verdad es que lo agradezco mucho. Creo que tienes razón, no suelo prestar mucha atención a los escenarios en los fanfics, salvo que no aparezcan en la serie, y no hago muchas descripciones, me centro más en la acción en sí (tal vez porque en mi cabeza lo veo así, como si estuviera centrado en primeros planos).rnEste fic no tendrá tantos capítulos (no suelo escribir nada tan largo), solo son 3, pero aun así espero que te guste.rn¡Muchas gracias por leer y comentar!

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